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[theweirdn8]

I promise issue #2 will be much better.

[Aertcz]

Errors:

Page Number: 2
Error: "East Scripts p. 16"
Correction: "Easy"

Page Number: 2
Error: "artist"
Correction: "artists"

Page Number: 3, first line
Error: "Interview"
Correction: lowercase


Page Number: 3, first line
Error:"How many Yoyogames competitions have you entered in won?
Please name then, if you have."
Correction: "How many Yoyogames competitions have you entered in and won?
Please name them, if you have."

Page Number: 4
Error:"Yes the most cyber war is being unleashed once again!"
Correction: sentence fragment

Page Number: 5
Error:"Toonimator can be used free, and is free to use in commercial products,"
Correction: comma should be a period

Page Number: 5
Error:"After we got the rendering system, we will move onto the plugins,
Which is really powerful after the windows and buttons were added into the plugins system,
Users can now make the best of Toonimator by themselves!"
Correction: revise run-on

Page Number: 6
Error: "Game Maker Games will finally be compatible with Mac PCs"
Correction: Mac and PC are different.


Page Number: 6
Error: "Mac, what’s next Linux?"
Correction : revise sentence, sentence fragment, new use of comma

Page Number: 8
Error: "The game will have features never before seen in any indie,
commercial, or GM Game."
Correction: complete bull-****

Page Number: 9
Error: "We must get something straight."
Correction: sentence fragment

Page Number: 9
Error: "the public names a game a mmo"
Correction: doesn't make sense at all

Page Number: 9
Error: "Multilayer"
Correction: "Multiplayer"


Page Number: 9
Error: "In our opinion the best Online GM game is: Intialy Online."
Correction: "In our opinion, the best Online GM game is: Intialy Online."


Page Number: 10
Error: "Wubly is asexual, and pink. Asexual is usually used for plants and fungi.
Wubly must collect rings, or else he DIES."
Correction: contradicts itself in the next sentence


Page Number: 13
Error: "Adbarlian Castles (RPG) is one of GM’s Most innovative 3d games."
Correction: "Adbarlian Castles (RPG) is technically a 3d game"

Page Number: 14
Error: "The enemy models and scenery is simply genius."
Correction: "The enemy models and scenery improved from the last version."

Page Number: 14
Error: "The Castles to the game is a well are all well designed rooms"
Correction: "The castles have well designed rooms"

Page Number: 14
Error: "There is not a sign of lag in the game so far"
Correction: "Your computer will shoot itself from the intense lag"

I didn't go through all the errors, I got a bit bored. Not that bad of a magazine. This really seems like a promo magazine for PGM. If it is, oh well, freedom of the press.

[theweirdn8]

I had two articles on the prodigygm. Also thanks for the error correction. I will make sure I search for all of my errors in a good proofread next time. Also the scheme colors I am going with is Blue and Ltgray. What do you all think?

[Jaboi]

*Facepalm*

ditto. needs more baking

We are being mavericks.

Never, ever say that again. I am speaking for lots of people on BOTH sides of the election when I say we will ALL communally vomit.

Edited by Jaboi, 25 November 2008 - 04:02 AM.

[theweirdn8]

I understand.

[theweirdn8]

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Edited by KC LC, 22 December 2008 - 05:31 PM.

[Dr. Watz0n]

Very unprofessional. The entire magazine is pretty much an example of what not to do: poor design, immediate religious statements, the like. You devote an entire page to something so stupid and pointless, Offensive Coding with Noobware, which is just a waste of space and bytes. Honestly, you need to seriously rethink this idea.

[-Oakleaf-]

Very unprofessional. The entire magazine is pretty much an example of what not to do: poor design, immediate religious statements, the like. You devote an entire page to something so stupid and pointless, Offensive Coding with Noobware, which is just a waste of space and bytes. Honestly, you need to seriously rethink this idea.

I couldn't agree more. If you make an entire section in the magazine to insult people you think are 'noobs', something is really wrong.

[theweirdn8]

Its what people want to see. I was simply behaving like gamemakerblog.com when they have blog entries of "noobage"

[tuntis]

Its what people want to see. I was simply behaving like gamemakerblog.com when they have blog entries of "noobage"

Rest assured knowing there's going to be a blog post to praise your awesomeness.

Edited by Tuntis, 19 December 2008 - 04:01 PM.

[KC LC]

Well, I only got to page 4, but I've read enough. This thread is closed.

Feel free to post your magazine elsewhere, but you may not distribute it on the GMC.

Update:
HCG has apologized and removed the offensive material from his magazine. We won't discuss it further.

I'll re-open this topic so members can discuss the new version (and only the new version).

Edited by KC LC, 22 December 2008 - 05:40 PM.

[Pie Person!]

Wow, I actually liked the new one a lot. Good work!

[theweirdn8]

God bless.

[d.man]

what the hell!?

i stopped reading after this:

Christmas is the time to show love, because God showed love to us by bringing him his son Jesus Christ.

it's okay if you're religious and stuff, but this has nothing to do with GM/programming or anything you wrote about in your mag and it's highly unprofessional.

[theweirdn8]

If you do not like it , then do not reply. I will mention what is important and relevant.

[Caniac]

what the hell!?

i stopped reading after this:

Christmas is the time to show love, because God showed love to us by bringing him his son Jesus Christ.

it's okay if you're religious and stuff, but this has nothing to do with GM/programming or anything you wrote about in your mag and it's highly unprofessional.

its perfectly acceptable in my book. besides, this is a reletively new mag. lets be nice, its really OK to put one or two offtopic comments in. or you could have an editors colunm and fill it with whatever you want, like most other GM mags.

[GameGeisha]

Aside from the controversial sentence, I also spot other flaws in the "magazine".

1. Saying "I don't care" on the last page is a huge demerit. The "NEW ATTITUDES" clause on the title page has yet to be realized.
2. The solid colours used to highlight text are very unsightly.
3. Emoticons should be reserved for personal blogs and informal chats. Writing a magazine with emoticons, even an online one, is not acceptable.
4. You have interchangeably used serif and sans-serif fonts throughout the magazine. Bad style.
5. Watch your writing style as well. Writing for a magazine is relatively formal compared to making a forum or blog post, and what I've seen on the magazine isn't up to par.

You should try reading more successful GM magazines (such as GMKing and Markup) and see what they're doing that you're not.

GameGeisha

[d.man]

If you do not like it , then do not reply. I will mention what is important and relevant.

no, i've put down constructive suggestion. your personal stances about jesus and how he died for us and all that **** don't have anything to do with game making, so restrain yourself from writing biased stuff like that.
if you wanna be 'reporter', 'editor' or whatever you want, be objective and write about stuff that has some point about subject you discuss.

well i'm off your topic now. if you think i'm wrong be my guest, but don't try to shot my opinion down if you don't like it, especially when i put some reasonable stuff on the table.

[scoz]

4. You have interchangeably used serif and sans-serif fonts throughout the magazine. Bad style.
GameGeisha

Oh, you have no idea how cut this one makes me. Even if you have no sense of design, surely you can tell that swapping from fonts with little fiddly bits to one without DOES NOT LOOK RIGHT, unsless it's a spread with a different theme to the rest of the mag (ie. like a nostalgia piece would use serifs, modern day stuff typically does not)

ARRRRRGGGHHH!

[mcoot]

This embodies about the worst a GM magazine can be:

Off-topic, religious, offensive statements.

Telling people not to play particular games.

Bad graphical design.

Saying "If you think this is offensive, I don't care!" at the end of the magazine.

One 'super hard' GM coding problem that a- wasn't hard at all, b- didn't even tell you what the 'problem' was and c- was just a block of code put into a square shape.

You obviously don't know what a tutorial rip-off is if you think George W Bush The Game is a tut ripoff. It may not be particularly good but you shouldn't say "I DONT RECOMMEND ANYONE PLAY THIS GAME. WTF! HOW DID IT WIN A CAGE MATCH?"

Just read a proper GM publication MarkUp, GMKing, GMTech, GMWeekly etc. - they don't try to offend, they do spellchecks, they try to put a bit of effort into design.

Try to do better next time.

Edited by mcoot, 24 December 2008 - 12:47 AM.